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some people
(the lucky ones)
get songs stuck in their heads.

i, on the other hand,
am left with words
that beat incessantly against
the confines of my brain.


last week, it was "gossamer."
i thought it was whimsical;
that was pleasant.
i saw the word
every which way i turned:
       a gossamer veil of sunlight,
       a silk shirt like gossamer,
       a spider hanging by a thread of it.

i hate the word now,
with all its whimsy washed away;
the hard g is too harsh and garish
against the roof of my mouth,
the double s too serpentine.
it feels numbingly stiff on my tongue,
like some sort of linguistic anomaly,
a could-be word that really shouldn't be.


today, it was your name.
(i never thought
proper nouns counted, but
evidently, they do.)
i didn't see you as much as i heard you,
somewhere,
in the whistling of the breeze
or the creaking of the hardwood floors.
your imposing yet warm presence
hovered somewhere
near the nape of my neck.

i admit that somewhere
in the recesses of my mind,
i hope that
my tongue never tires
of curling around your syllables,
no matter what scars
your consonants carve in my throat,
no matter what holes
your vowels leave in my lungs.
this one was a bit hasty, but i wanted to get it out before the spark faded.
i have a bit of a love/hate relationship with the ever-vague "you". but anonymity it usually quite fitting.
there are a lot of things that might change. maybe some things to add. i guess we'll see as the time passes, but for now... sure.

(also, i'm experimenting with fonts. i quite like a nice, clean serif typeface.)

feedback questions:
is the piece cohesive? or does it just seem weirdly random?
also, does the font choice affect the poem? (using times new roman instead of the default verdana)
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Given 2013-11-03
gossamer, and you by ~escap-ing ( Suggested by WinteroftheSoul and Featured by GrimFace242 )
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drifter-dallyings Nov 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Hi! This lovely work has been featured here: fav.me/d6uqz9a.
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:iconholygreatgrandparome:
holygreatgrandparome Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You basically just took every thought that's gone through my mind in the past three years and made it poetry. I applaud you. I've been trying to do that for ages now.
Right now, for me, it's the word "slightly" that's bugging me…
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:icontornadowraith88:
That's... kind of amazing. 
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:iconescap-ing:
thank you so much (:
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:iconptdahood:
PTDaHood Nov 3, 2013   Writer
Isn't this world of passionate one of many blurred-border nations and a like temperamental atmosphere?
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:iconescap-ing:
i suppose so!
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:iconptdahood:
^w^
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:icongwendolyn12:
Gwendolyn12 Nov 3, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I can totally relate.
Beautiful poem.:aww:
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